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Hollow Spears
By illwynd
Disclaimer: Not mine, just playing!
Rating: PG
Summary: In the Dead Marshes, time wears away...
Notes: Another drabble for the Six Days of Spooky!
x-posted to [livejournal.com profile] tolkien100

The wet reeds point skyward, pale and water-washed spears of fallen forms that lie now beneath the murk. An oily film on the water makes a mirror for the grey above, and no sun shall bleach their bones. Instead time wears away, and nightly flames burn.

No one watched the creeping marsh swallowing dry graves. Opponents lie here side by side, while twisted forms of water-weeds cast ghastly shadows across their empty eyes. The sad wind still echoes their falling cries.

Look out across the bare marshland. Insects flit above the hollow spears, as if the battle were only yesterday.

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Date: 2007-10-29 03:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] caras-galadhon.livejournal.com
*shiver* Fascinating and so terribly spooky. A really evocative piece. I'm very much enjoying your Six Days of Spooky!

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Date: 2007-10-29 03:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] illwynd.livejournal.com
The Dead Marshes are particularly conducive to spooky, aren't they? ^_~ I'm really glad to hear you're liking these--I'm certainly having fun writing them!

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Date: 2007-11-03 05:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lilan14.livejournal.com
Oooh, I love it...it's very poetic, not just spooky! I love that last sentence, I really do!

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Date: 2007-11-04 04:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] illwynd.livejournal.com
Thanks! I've been writing lots of poetry lately, some must have sneaked into this. ^_~ Glad you liked!

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Date: 2007-11-04 01:39 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] roh-wyn.livejournal.com
Insects flit above the hollow spears, as if the battle were only yesterday.

That's really well written. Nice reflection on both the horror and timelessness of battle and death.

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Date: 2007-11-04 04:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] illwynd.livejournal.com
Thanks! Glad to hear this worked for you!

reflection on both the horror and timelessness of battle and death.
Hmm, that's a pretty good description of the Marshes themselves too, when ya think about it. ^_~

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Date: 2007-11-15 12:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] edoraslass.livejournal.com
The Dead Marshes have always freaked me out, and they're not freaking me out any less here. *shudders*

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Date: 2007-11-16 04:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] illwynd.livejournal.com
Any place called the Dead Marshes is bound to be freaky. :p

Thanks for the comment!

re: Six Days of Spooky: Day 2: Hollow Spears

Date: 2008-03-24 09:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lanthirel.livejournal.com
(Note: just doing a little catch-up at [livejournal.com profile] tolkien100.)

This is very poetic, I would say elegiac in tone. It captures the feel of the Dead Marshes perfectly.

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